Audience Response of my First Draft

I have completed my first draft of my short film. I asked four individuals to watch it and give me their opinions so that I could accommodate my audience and provide them with what they want to see.

Here is the Prezi to present their opinions:

 



Ancillary Task - Film Review (Screenshot 6)

Regarding my previous post, I have now tried placing the image on my review instead of the poster. I prefer it on here, as although it is a nice image, I don't feel it is appropriate for a film poster.

 

This image has not been fully edited, hence the jagged edges on the individuals, and the background, which is only temporary.

 



Changes to the Script

Due to some filming issues, I've had to rewrite the script to some extent. The segment I had to rewrite is the first scene involving Emily and Thomas as children.

When rereading my script, I decided that the first scene was possibly the weakest. For this reason, I decided to write the scene as Rebecca Graham and David Connelly meeting for the first time. Emily (Rebecca) is dancing in the school theatre, and Thomas (David) accidentally stumbles across her whilst trying to find a place to practice. Emily strikes up a conversation, connoting her confidence, and Thomas shyly replies. By the end of the scene, Thomas and Emily move into a starting dance position which leads into the second scene where the two are in a dace competition.

 

I have filmed this scene and I am much happier with this alteration is it felt much more doable compared to my first idea.

Ancillary Task - Film Poster (Screenshot 11)

Unfortunately, I have ran slightly behind my filming and working schedule due to clashing of free time between myself and the actors. However, yesterday I was able to take photos of the two in order to get my Ancillary Tasks completed as soon as possible. I am currently trying out this photo, however I am tempted to try it out on my article, rather than for the poster. I don't feel it has a strong enough impact to be the poster.

I also have a dance studio image in the background, however, this is just a photo from the internet as I have not yet had the opportunity to take photos of backgrounds.

 



Ancillary Task - Film Review (Screenshot 5)

I have changed my film review layout quite significantly. I have changed the positioning of the title, as well as adding the "directed by" segments, etc. I have also made the text smaller so i could fit the ratings in the corner.

 



Teenage Dance Scene (Behind the Scene Shots)

((Hi to my new Romanian friends!!)) Over the school half term, I came into school to film one of my scenes. Another student, Oliver, came to take some behind the scenes shots for me. Here they are.

 

 

Significant Changes

Unfortunately, Jordan will no longer play Emily in my short film. This is due to our clashing schedules and a significant amount of work on both parts. We decided that it was for the best that I recast the part of Emily. I have now cast Rebecca Graham. Rebecca is a hardworking and enthusiastic student who is passionate about acting, and so I know that I can rely on her.

 

 

This is Rebecca.